Population Between Two Countries

8 Pages 2044 Words

Subject: Society, Space and the Environment (TG1090)

Topic: "Compare and contrast the differences in population characteristics between developed and developing countries."

Grade Awarded: Distinction

Tutor’s Comments: Your essay shows good command of academic referencing and contains useful, interesting, illustrative material. It is way over the word length. I think you could easily have made it shorter by some editing - I've edited some parts for you to eliminate the padding. You need to focus on making your writing more succinct, and ensuring that you always make your meaning clear. Use of sub-headings may help. You have analysed some of the differences and presented a reasonably coherent line of argument.
Marking Schedule:
CRITERION MAJOR POINTS POSSIBLE MARK YOUR MARK
Relevance to topic Answers questionContains relevant detail 10 7.5
Analysis Development of issues 10 7
Readability & expression Grammar, sentence construction. Ability to communicate main points effectively.Correct spelling Punctuation 10 7.5
Organisation & structure IntroductionConclusionParagraphs 10 7
Referencing Correct referencing styleProper list of referencesHas the literature on the topic been mentioned? 5 4
Illustrative material Relevance of maps, tables of data and diagramsCorrect conventions on mapsProper titles & sources on maps etc 5 3.5

(Note: This sample is provided in the exact form it was submitted and corrections and comments made in the text by the lecturer are not included. Tables, maps and diagrams have not been included in the sample.)

Comparing and contrasting population characteristics of developed and developing countries give valuable insights into social, political and economic processes of countries. All numerical data given in this essay are in tables 1. and 2., and is correlated from the CIA (Central
Intelligence Agency) website (ODCI, 1998). It is important to point out that countries that were picked were c...